Remorse

I woke, I choked

To reality I broke

But these dreams strangled me in my wake, still

Leading me to my loud weep and chill

 

I was drowned, I was down

Deep inside this guilt, like a foolish clown

In the middle of crowd of children—

—you got beaten and beaten—

Who begged for a bit of happiness

When for himself he had no less

 

I was fallen, I was trapped

In the maze I had built and kept

Poor me to fail in my own game—

—to swap some fame for shame

 

So I sit and pray, to God my pain I say

As He is the One who is blind to none

 

(There, I stay awake, still waiting for a little forgiveness)

 

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Writer Dream_Seeker
Dream_Seeker at Remorse (7 years 28 weeks ago)
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Saya suka puisi dengan tema2 gelap kyk begini haha :)

Writer Me_
Me_ at Remorse (7 years 51 weeks ago)
80

try and pray...

Writer Riesling
Riesling at Remorse (8 years 22 hours ago)
100

Saya sendiri udah amnesia gimana bikin puisi...
Perfect.

Writer ardeliakarisa
ardeliakarisa at Remorse (8 years 3 days ago)
100

just give you a point I can't make poetry english or indonesia, how poor iam ya -_-

Writer starfish
starfish at Remorse (8 years 2 weeks ago)
80

Oh gawd, I can't stand the angst XD But my fav part: the last line [there, i stay awake..] sounds haunting but still hopeful. ^^

Writer ianz_doank
ianz_doank at Remorse (8 years 2 weeks ago)
90

Keren!! Salut buat yang bisa bikin puisi pake b.inggris..
#meskipun b.inggrisku jelek, hehe..

Writer nayacorath
nayacorath at Remorse (8 years 2 weeks ago)
2550

Keren bangett!! Pemilihan kata-katanya bagus banget..
Pengen bisa juga.. *__*

arreddevil339 at Remorse (8 years 2 weeks ago)
70

keren

Writer Yafeth
Yafeth at Remorse (8 years 4 weeks ago)
100

Great poem! Especially the last part.

Writer pelangikelabu
pelangikelabu at Remorse (8 years 4 weeks ago)

"So I sit and pray, to God my pain I say,
As He is the One who is blind to none"

mind if quote this?
suka sekali sama bait itu. :)

Writer synrio
synrio at Remorse (8 years 4 weeks ago)

Monggo monggo silakan :)

pinky_chan at Remorse (8 years 4 weeks ago)
90

buat lagiii... saya sukaaaaaaaa... diksinya baggguuuss

Writer aiyura
aiyura at Remorse (8 years 5 weeks ago)
100

awesomee :)

Writer synrio
synrio at Remorse (8 years 5 weeks ago)

Thank you :)

Writer fendyhape
fendyhape at Remorse (8 years 5 weeks ago)
100

waw.. indah syairmu bos

Writer synrio
synrio at Remorse (8 years 5 weeks ago)

Terima kasih kunjungannya :)

Writer kikiavicenna
kikiavicenna at Remorse (8 years 5 weeks ago)
100

Wow, Syn. Great job. I've always loved English poetry, but had never had the gut to make one... I'm not really good with words.

Love this! :D

Writer synrio
synrio at Remorse (8 years 5 weeks ago)

Thanks Kiki XD
Well, actually I am not good either :p

pinky_chan at Remorse (8 years 5 weeks ago)
100

saya suka bangeeettt.. *_* ini puisimu sendiri atau gimana?

Writer synrio
synrio at Remorse (8 years 5 weeks ago)

Puisi sendiri dong XD
Makasih kunjungannya ..