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Writer rosedragon
rosedragon at Homeward (11 years 19 weeks ago)
80

I like it. Sorry, can't comment much mroe than this. =p

Writer icizh
icizh at Homeward (11 years 26 weeks ago)
60

kaga ngerti bahasa inggris pasive gw... hahaha...

tapi gw ngerti apa makna dan pesannya..

Writer Zhang he
Zhang he at Homeward (11 years 27 weeks ago)
70

Sekali lagi, another puisi yang terlalu sederhana...

But aq bisa tangkep maknanya.
Terus nulis ^^

-zhang-

Writer imr_aja
imr_aja at Homeward (11 years 32 weeks ago)
70

gue sih nggak gape masalah poem, tapi menurut instingku... menarik!!

Writer shadow
shadow at Homeward (11 years 32 weeks ago)
70

Bukannya mau belagu neh..
Tapi kayanya ada beberapa grammar yagn kurang tepat..
Misalnya: Rickety rain
SKalo dibaca memang masuk akal. Tapi secara literature, bisa pake adjective yang lebih tepat. Mungkin Unstable rain..

Nice try..

Writer avian dewanto
avian dewanto at Homeward (11 years 32 weeks ago)
80

please read my critic with your cool head. i have no intention to offense.

i have read hundreds poems in English literature. according to my experience, even the writer wrote it like a poem but it is not a poem. cause in English literature a poem must have at least a meaning in every lyric. i suggest this "poem" must rewritten.

English literature has been building for several decades so they have many rule that writer can not obey. but, for someone who try to write a poem in English, i really appreciate.

Writer adrian.achyar
adrian.achyar at Homeward (11 years 34 weeks ago)

Hoa! Hampir 200! Teman-teman, makasih ya atas komentarnya :)

Guys, please read my poems & stories at K.com ^_^

Writer takiyo_an-nabhani
takiyo_an-nabhani at Homeward (11 years 34 weeks ago)
80

Assalamu'alaikum
There are some others main in my mind about this poem, not only about campus coz there's "Lord" in your poem. Simple, isnt' it.

Writer dirgita
dirgita at Homeward (11 years 37 weeks ago)
80

Mas Adrian pernah minggat dari kampus, ya? Kenapa?

Writer wehahaha
wehahaha at Homeward (11 years 40 weeks ago)
90

puisi yang bagus. Bahasa inggrisnya juga pas. Cuman rasanya gak indah aj di mata karena jumlah baris per bait yang berubah-ubah itu. Mungkin bisa dicari beberapa kata lagi yang cocok? Pake repetisi juga gapapa. Biasanya bisa dipake sebagai penekanan.

Writer Chatarou
Chatarou at Homeward (11 years 40 weeks ago)
90

well. why ugly Monday just come over once in a week.....
We need at least one more..

chatarou

Writer djava_wong
djava_wong at Homeward (11 years 42 weeks ago)
80

english, very great...., maknanya keren sekali

Writer cat
cat at Homeward (11 years 44 weeks ago)
80

english .. oh .. saya paling pusing dgn bahasa inggris

tp kata-kata yg kamu gunakan mudah di mengerti, bahkan sangat ringkas (menurut saya sih)

kata-kata yg pendek, baris-baris yang singkat seperti mempertegas isi yg ingin kamu sampaikan ..

aduh ... apa sih yg cat bicarakan ..
cat juga kgk ngerti bro .. nice lah.

Puisi ku : Di persimpangan

Writer panah hujan
panah hujan at Homeward (11 years 46 weeks ago)
80

i love it.... yes i do...

dwisasongkosupriyadi at Homeward (11 years 47 weeks ago)
50

not as subjectively i say : i don't understand what does this poem talk about. :D

Writer yosi_hsn
yosi_hsn at Homeward (11 years 47 weeks ago)
100

Tapi yang ini bagus banget. Saya suka pilihan kata-katanya.

Writer yugi_yakuza
yugi_yakuza at Homeward (11 years 51 weeks ago)
90

setuju ama yang laennya...
Aluuuuuuuussss...!!
mantab bro
^_^

(akhirnya dapet Link Sefry) :D

Writer mtop666
mtop666 at Homeward (11 years 51 weeks ago)
90

Welcome back, mas dosen... :)

Terus melangkah...

Writer vini_vidi_vici
vini_vidi_vici at Homeward (12 years 18 hours ago)
90

baguuuus!
kayaknya cuma itu..

Writer noir
noir at Homeward (12 years 1 week ago)
80

Jadi kangen kampus gw hiks hiks

-br main ke depok lagi barusan-

Writer ilhamduilah
ilhamduilah at Homeward (12 years 2 weeks ago)
70

puisinya enak dibaca, dan maknanya eksplisit, ga bertele-tele.... bikin lagi ya... Pak Dosen (?)

Writer my bro
my bro at Homeward (12 years 2 weeks ago)
90

Aluuus beneeer.
dasar bapak doseen hehehe.

keren bro.

Writer bleu_freak
bleu_freak at Homeward (12 years 2 weeks ago)
100

puisinya hebat euy!
selamat kembali yooo
semoga sukses!!

Writer Villam
Villam at Homeward (12 years 2 weeks ago)
100

hmmm...
biasanya saya suka gak paham sama bahasa dalam puisi.
tapi yang ini kedengarannya bagus.

Writer Littleayas
Littleayas at Homeward (12 years 2 weeks ago)
80

ini sih enaknya dibikin lagu..hihi..
kata2nya bagus..englishnya mudah dicerna jadi bisa dibaca bahkan sama orang awam loh ^^

betewe eniwei buswei...ternyata 'sampah2' lo bagus..hihi..apa patut masih dibilang sampah??

welcome home bro

^^

Writer bl09on
bl09on at Homeward (12 years 2 weeks ago)
80

ati ati sampah kemudian berbahaya lho...^^ keren bang

Writer arien arda
arien arda at Homeward (12 years 2 weeks ago)
80

nice poem Uncle Adrian...

kenaa harus dibilang sampah..
wah...

inikan bagus..
karya2 oom yang lain juga bagus..

hmmm..
ada apa ya???

keep writing

Writer moesafeer
moesafeer at Homeward (12 years 2 weeks ago)
100

Yang sampah aja kayak gini. Bagaimana yg bukan sampah?

Meski aku gak gitu vaham bahasa linggis, eh bahasa inggris, tapi agak2 mudeng.

Salam kenal

Writer sefry_chairil
sefry_chairil at Homeward (12 years 2 weeks ago)
100

udah ah.. jangan ngomong sampah lagi..^^ karya-karya di k.com bukan sampah kok!! :) karya-karya di sini bagus-bagus dan aku yakin semua berbakat dan semuanya mempunyai keinginan untuk maju, hanya beberapa harus diasah lagi bakatnya biar tambah oke! hehe..^^ kita kan sama-sama belajar. Gak ada yang instan kan? Semua butuh proses..

nice poem, hun!
miss u so much..
Gak sabar nunggu Sabtu!!!

Ti amero sempre!!

Writer angel0n3arth
angel0n3arth at Homeward (12 years 2 weeks ago)
80

home is always beautiful to my heart, and this is nice poem.. i'll wait for the others..!